No, I’m Not…(Haiku)

 

so many thoughts no words

I will not squat to the blank

to surrender self

 

Daily Prompt: Squat

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7 thoughts on “No, I’m Not…(Haiku)

  1. A haiku senryu comment:

    your thoughts transcribed
    so many words on paper
    you filled the blank
    —–
    ere you wont squat
    I cant comprehend your way
    have I missed the point
    —–
    its me not you yes
    ‘m lost which path do I take
    I am stuck at a junction
    —–
    the passage of time
    often leads to leads to fruition
    treading carefully
    —–
    have i arrived
    there is no name I can see
    now it’s déjà vu
    —–
    I see blank filled in
    my words my thoughts now transcribed
    no squatting space took
    —–
    senryu haiku
    my reply to your verse
    best regards take care

    Mick

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      1. I got the point now, you had thoughts but could not put them into words, and you wouldn’t squat to surrender, (lower yourself), yeah I definitely was on the wrong track? To answer your question, I would say senryu, as you refer to a self confessed human foible . Out my replies this was the only haiku, with the typo corrected:

        the passage of time
        often leads to fruition
        treading carefully

        all the others were reference to my weakness, (foible) in not understanding the point you were making in yours, making them senryu. I can only add that the strength of my understanding in senryu v haiku is how I referred to it in a previous comment. I know you know that a kigo must be use in haiku, and that there are many Mine in the above haiku being time, a reference to the seasons, and fruition, the conclusion of a season.
        In case you thought I had forgot, a big THANK YOU, for your ‘wow”, appreciated.

        Mick

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          1. I find it a good way to practice, and it all represents my true inspired feelings. In a way I think the Japanese poets, and maybe they, and even the ordinary folk still do use its brevity, in so few words to pass on feelings, what ere they may be, to this very day.

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