Those Eyes of Yours

roused soul closed eyes night

breeze few memories vivid

thought long forgotten

finding a way to torment

the weakened suffering soul

The Tanka was inspired by a poem Tere Ankhon Se Hi (Those Eyes of Yours) of Gulzar which I had also tried to translate (free-translation):

The morn drew curtain of horizon as you open your eyes, 

The night drop its laziness as you close your eyes

Your eyes feel like some infallible chasm that need awakening…

When those lids get open the vision get resonated, in a manner,—

As if it’s the long of devotees getting a voice in chants of Mandir

And when you drop them, it feels like the conclusion of Azaan

Your eyes…the pensive, composed, serene eyes of yours…

By those eyes of yours, veracity get define

By those eyes of yours, the actuality get define

Dedicated to Her

Daily Prompt: Vivid


7 thoughts on “Those Eyes of Yours”

  1. its a sensitive man that can see and wants to see whats behind a woman’s closed lids as she sleeps, for it means he values her thoughts more than her body, which of course he loves since men are very physical in nature, but a sensitive man always wants to go deeper and in going deeper he discovers more than her physical and he is amazed how in love with her mind he can be – this is how i feel about this particular one – you are the Romantic Poet – take the title!

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    1. Meenakshi Ma’am conferred me with the title of Scientific Poet…and now you confer me with Romantic poet…thank you for the title…The original poem that I had free translated is by Gulzar…he is an renowned poet as well as lyricist…you might had heard of him for Slumdog Millionaire…the way he use Urdu define many things in subtle manner…so it was an uphill task for me to translate his poem…thanks again for the appreciation…

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