Sabishii [Troiku]

The sleigh [Tan Taigi (Translation by Keisen)]

Looking back;
Now each other
Being in the snow

Horse 1

looking back

the old days are broken frames

infested treasure

Horse 2

now each other

walked away silence is path end

mist wish encounter 

Horse 3

being in the snow

love is saved a secret cave

ice flakes covered path 


Sabishii means lonely, lonesome, desolate, solitary

Troiku is a Haiku form created back in 2012 by Chèvrefeuille. To know more click.

Featured image is of Tan Taigi procure from Blogspot.


Heeding Haiku with Chèvrefeuille (04/26/2017)

14 responses to “Sabishii [Troiku]”

  1. Sangbad what a beautiful Troiku you have shared here. I loved reading it.

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    1. Thank you Sir…it is my pleasure you love it…I am a Haiku enthusiastic…if you can please check my Haiku section in my blog…I think you will love few more of my Haiku…

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      1. I will for sure check your haiku section. How long do you write haiku?

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        1. It will be my pleasure…I am writing Haiku for last 5-6 months…

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  2. I should really ware my glasses all the time, yours are perfect, all mine are just that, mine, not as Chèvrefeuille suggested. I will however have another look at all of mine and see if I can make them right. I am truly grateful Sangbad, and just a tad embarrassed ☺

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    1. Oh Mick you are a funny old man…do not be embarrassed…err make human…and you have written inspired troiku…so don’t feel bad…

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      1. Thank you for your kind words Sangbad, appreciated!

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        1. Not to mention Mick…you inspired me again…I will try your way of Troika sooner…

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          1. When you say my way, if you are referring to my first attempt, I am not sure that under the rules they qualify as troiku, as the sledge, (troika) was not carried through to the horses. The ‘Crows Charge’ troiku I have corrected to follow Chèvrefeuille guidelines, albeit using my own haiku as the sledge, as in using the lines to start each horse. Anyway I have to go and review your horror haiku, muh ahhh!

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            1. You have unknowingly created a new form…and that what I was talking of…

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              1. I did think that too, and I am honoured that you thought of them in that way too. Cant wait to see what you come up with….

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                1. You have to wait for that…check my post titled Break…

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                  1. Taking one too 🙂

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