The original poem is being taken from the book Wings of Poetry: Layers of Life (2018) by my fellow blogger admirer Meenakshidi (Sethi) who has also become my second Elder Sister. The poem name is “Till This Cycle Breaks”, and it goes like this–
From five elements
to non-existent form
in atmospheric realm
to again be caged
till this cycle breaks.
I’ve tried to respond to, and rethink the poetess thoughts in each line to write this respond poem of mine:
Time is here
The fire will now reach the crescendo to touch stars, the life-long desire
A few moments back I was the optimum truth
As I passed in the flimsy guise
Free for a while what do I have, what do I hold
National Poem Writing Month 2018 Day#18:
Write a poem isn’t exactly based in revision, but it’s not exactly not based in revision, either. It also sounds a bit more complicated than it is, so bear with me! First, find a poem in a book or magazine (ideally one you are not familiar with). Use a piece of paper to cover over everything but the last line. Now write a line of your own that completes the thought of that single line you can see, or otherwise responds to it. Now move your piece of paper up to uncover the second-to-last line of your source poem, and write the second line of your new poem to complete/respond to this second-to-last line. Keep going, uncovering and writing, until you get to the first line of your source poem, which you will complete/respond to as the last line of your new poem. It might not be a finished draft, but hopefully it at least contains the seeds of one.