The Last Note

“The piano had survived somehow, Ma’am…”, she walked towards it slowly. Memory seems to be the force of attraction. She removed the veil of the piano. The fire had left it unhurt. Her slender fingers open the cover of the keys before brushing them. A cheat touched her fingers; it had been tucked in the hinge of the cover. He had scribbled in his exquisite handwriting–can’t live without you…am coming to you…A smile passed over her lips. “Ma’am…”the young attendant was going to say s’thing when she saw the tall stature was getting dissolved into air. 

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers 03/07/2017

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19 responses to “The Last Note”

  1. Love the way you started it and the way memories were leading here. But I got a little confused at the end. I thought the stature to be the person she was trying to suppress inside her and after reading the note she felt empowered to stand tall. Did I get it right? Tight word count leave a lot to imagination! Good effort on this one. I think you went with a good idea.

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    1. wow…another interpretation…I had created a lady ghost and the rest–the vanishing and all those left on my readers…thanks for this interpretation…

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  2. Wonderful story! Very intriguing! Welcome to the FFfAW challenge. We are happy you have joined us. 🙂

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    1. thanks for the appreciation…will try to participate from now every week…

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      1. That will be wonderful Sangbad!

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  3. This was a good read 🙂

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    1. thanks for the review and stopping by…

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  4. Short and sweet 🙂 I have nominated you for the Cramm award. If you are interested, please go through my latest post 🙂

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    1. okay am interested…going through our post soon…

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      1. Great! Can’t wait to see the post! 🙂

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  5. If you’d like me to make suggestions I’d say, first, lovely idea with a lot behind it, the fire, the woman coming back to see the piano which obviously holds memories.
    It would be better to show speech in the accepted way ie between inverted commas on a separate line otherwise the spoken words come over the same as the unspoken words of the note in the piano which you would leave in italics (also on a separate line).
    How do you say ‘s’how’? If it’s some dialectic pronunciation that others will understand, fine. If it’s just shorthand for ‘somehow’ I wouldn’t use it.
    What is a ‘cheat’? I didn’t understand that.
    What is ‘the veil’? Do you mean the piano cover, or is the woman wearing a veil?
    The end is odd because you haven’t mentioned a statue before nor why it would dissolve. Who is it?

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    1. thanks for the suggestion…from next time going to use the general way i.e. inverted comma, using minimal shorthand (s’how is somehow)…the veil is the cover of the piano…cheat is actually a little torn piece of paper to pass short note…I don’t know what the actually English for this…I’ve used the colloquial or general English term that we use…stature not statue it is…stature means height generally…the lady is a ghost and the other explanations I’m leaving on the reader…thanks Jane…it’s always a pleasure to have a discussion with you…

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      1. It’s also a pleasure to talk things over with you, Sangbad. I have the impression that when you ask for constructive criticism, you mean it. Most people really mean they’d like a big dollop of praise.

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        1. no no…I like Like button…the praise…but, at the same time I eagerly wait for reviews and comments…the latter let me ruminate on writings which I’m very much passionate of…

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          1. I’m glad I’m not discouraging you 🙂

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            1. no Jane…you’re in round the way encouraging me…to do better…thanks for this…

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              1. I might try doing this for a living 🙂

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